“5. 4. 3. 2. 1! Ready or not, here I come,” Fiona yelled out into the murky forest. She started running around the wooded area looking for her friends. It’s been a long 3 minutes and she hasn’t found anyone. She’d been playing in these woods all her life, she knew where all the good spots were, yet she still couldn’t find her sneaky friends. “Guys? It’s not funny anymore. I’m serious. Come out,” She screamed with concern in her voice. “Guys?” She repeated. No answer. This time she was extremely worried about her friends. She turned the corner of a tree and couldn’t believe what her eyes were seeing. A door, in a tree? Nah. She’s never seen this before. She blinked and rubbed her eyes. It was still there. She stepped closer to the creepy door. She hesitated to knock on the old rotting door. She decided she would. She knocked on the door three loud times. KNOCK KNOCK KNOCK. On the third knock the door creaked open. She looked inside. It was all clear. She took a deep breath and walked inside. The floor creaked creepily. She gaped at what she saw. Oh no. Oh no no no. It couldn’t be. It couldn’t. It wouldn’t. It was. Her friends, lifeless in the next dark room.
that was very good, i like the description and detail you put into it. i also like the dramatic ending.
A long time ago there was this beautiful and peaceful village called Diana village. There were these two kids named Aly and neekalodge. They were brother and sister, they did everything together. They swam together, they did school together, they played sports together, and they even did homework together. They were very close. One day after a long tiring day at school they were walking home from school and aly noticed something. A little path that looked dark and abandoned. “ Neekolodge! Look, there's a new path. Can we go check it out?” Aly said excitedly. “No. mom said to go straight home after school, maybe tomorrow” neekolodge said. Aly was disappointed but they just made their way home safely. That night Aly just couldn't wait to see that path. So she got up very early that morning and went straight to the path. She was a little bit anxious that something bad would happen but she tried to think positive. When she got there the sun was rising so that made her more confident to go in the path. But little did she know something bad was going to1 happen to her. She walked in and there was a big light. She was following it until she heard a whisper. She kept following the sound. But moments later a dark figure appeared in the distance. She ran as fast as she could back to the village but she tripped and fell. She was passed out laying on the ground. When she woke up she was getting pulled by the figure. She looked up AND IT WAS HER MOM. but she looked different. “Mom,” said Aly in a scratchy voice. The figure dropped her and put its hood down. “Wait, you're not my mom!” aly said loudly. “I'm not your mom, I'm your older sister” the person said. “ wait? I don't have a sister. I have a brother neekolodge. Who are you?” She said concerned. “ your mother is a secret worker for this path. Its called the forbidden path for a reason. And when i was seven she had you guys and made me work here. She never told me why. What we do here is whoever comes in the path we take them and take out their memories and then they work here and store memories.” her sister said. “Wow that was a lot to take in. So what's your name.” she said. “ My name is elena. I'm not really supposed to tell but ya ``Elena said. “ ALY ITS YOUR MOM GET OVER HERE” Elena ran as fast as he could to this glowing door. Alys mom ran to her and dragged her through this door her mom turned around for a second and transformed into her brother! DUN DUN DUNNNNNN
I think thats a really good story Sam!!
Yeah same it was amazing!
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